“JUST IN TIME FOR THE OLD MAN’S PASSING” is now live even though there is one mistake. See if you can find it. I edited it out on the draft but it popped up again. Oh well. It wants to ride along for the journey.
This is the story we’ve been working on with the Hero’s Journey structure.
Step Five in the Hero structure is “Crossing the first threshold”.
This stage often involves an inciting incident that precipitates movement forward in the story.
It is a turning point. Let’s look at “Just in Time for the Old Man’s Passing”
“You know, your father had a heart attack while your step mother…” HERE THE MENTOR TALKS WITH THE DAUGHTER. SHE TRIGGERS A REACTION IN SARAH AND FUELS THAT EMOTION OF RESENTMENT AND ANGER BY TELLING SARAH ABOUT THE ARGUMENT. THIS IS THE INCITING INCIDENT AND THE TURNING POINT WHERE SARAH FEELS THE NEED TO MOVE INTO ACTION, EVEN IF IT IS JUST GETTING TO HER FATHER. EVEN SO, MRS. HARGREAVES PLAYS THE ROLE OF MENTOR BECAUSE SHE MOVES SARAH ALONG AND HELPS HER GET TO WHERE SHE NEEDS TO GO.
“His new wife,” I interrupted.
“Well, his new wife and he were shouting at each other. I heard her say she needed some time to settle in.”
“Oh. I guess they were referring to me.” A lump of scone stuck in my throat. THIS SECTION ALSO INCORPORATES STAGE SIX IN THE HERO’S JOURNEY: TESTS, ALLIES AND ENEMIES. WHICH DO YOU THINK MRS. HARGREAVES IS?
“Well dear, I wouldn’t have told you, but, I thought you should know what happened. She’s a nasty one isn’t she?”
I looked up at the old face, sallow and knotted with worry lines.
“I haven’t met her yet,” I said.
“Did she say what hospital they were going to?”
“The ambulance took them. Otherwise, I’d take you if I knew.”
“Does the wife have a cell phone?”
The neighbor shook her head. “Don’t think so. They were in an awful rush. I told her to call me if she needed me. She has my number.”
A telephone rang inside the house and she rushed inside. I wondered how I could figure out where my father had gone. A few minutes later, the neighbor ambled out, dark sunglasses and a tissue in her hand. “He’s in the ICU.”
“Which hospital?” I asked.”