Write a story about this picture using nouns that offer a vision in the reader’s head. 100 words with no adverbs. Send it in if you wish.
What do you see in your head with: “animals roaming the desert entered the fence around a large ranch.”
What do you see in your head with the following:
“A pack of five dingoes found the hole in the barbed wire fence that ran the perimeter of Thousand Mile Sheep Station.”
The latter example offers a visual with movement and implication for action. It implies that the dingoes were cunning and determined enough to find “the” hole. This is an example of “what if?” What if the dingoes found the kitchen windows open? What if the dingoes mangled the sheep? What if the teenage son heard a noise in the night and went outside to investigate? etc.
The words you choose, the meaning of those words, offer a movie in the readers’ heads. Vague words and flowery language offer little or nothing. Your words carry weight. Make them support your story and paint a picture in the reader’s head.
“The business of the poet and novelist is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things, and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things.” Thomas Hardy